Diurnal Journal - On Occasion

Very well taken, GaiusI found this while scrolling, scrolling. . . .searching"When the pin is pulled, Mr. Grenade is not our friend. "-U.S.Marine CorpsThat was all good stuff. The kind I look for.Faustus

As a fellow poet I must of course offer critique:

 

"February is the dreariest month of the year.

Pantagathus and Perinax aren't here."

 

If you put an even in there, it flows a lot better:

 

Pantagathus and Pertinax aren't even here.

 

"Faustus needs a good tax man.

Coldrail is locked in the porta can.

The Klingon is a frozen man.

Kosmic eats frogs out of a tin can.

And Ramses can be a pain in the can. "

 

I'd really try to avoid rhyming can with can. C'mon, you can do better.

 

Well done!

L. W., I am being very serious now, why don't you fix it up, and post it here? No offense will be taken, as this is just for fun. Add to it, if you like. We'll publish it!

 

Thanks for the 'well done'.

You take a loss better than anyone, seeing as how you've had to endure so much. Kidding please don't kill me GO the Great!

 

Or magnificent whichever one helps you check for my spelling errors.

Still trying to figure out how I wound up in "combat boots." As in "your mother wears...?"

 

-- Nephele

Still trying to figure out how I wound up in "combat boots." As in "your mother wears...?"

 

-- Nephele

 

Yup! I warned you!

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Gaius Optimus Maximus would do nicely, you pencultucky farmer.

 

Epigram for Gaius Octavius

 

What cogent postings would shoot from

Your keyboard like a geyser,

If, to comment, first you had

To use a breathalyzer.

 

-- Nephele

I'm confused Cecil,

 

The poem is great but..........Why am I'm lost in lovely Warwick???

 

I'm from Leeds in Yorkshire!!

 

But thanks for the mention anyway

You're from Leeds? Sorry! Sorry! Thank God you're not from Kent! Oh, for a stolen rhyme.........

 

There was a young man from Leeds.

Who swallowed a package of seeds.

Great tufts of grass grew out of his Censored .

While his Censored were covered with weeds!

Counter Epigram for My Lady Nephele:

 

Gaius is obtuse.

Gaius is opaque.

Gaius relies,

On cogitative guys.

 

DoLl eats sushi from a stick.

 

It's 2 sticks, actually

Nephele: Actually I'm the one who wears combat boots (well...something very similar LOL they rock) and it was depression, not a cold.

L_W, depression can be understood as a cold of the brain requiring cupping.

 

DoLl, can you eat sushi off two sticks at a time?

 

DoLl, can you eat sushi off two sticks at a time?

 

Don Tomato: Yes...they're called chopsticks